1 下列图画描述的是你在十月十五日放学路上发生的事情.请据此写一篇日记.记叙事情发
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This afternoon when I was on my way home from school, Ifound a building on fire. I rushed to a nearby telephone box and called thefirefighters.
Several minutes later, thefirefighters arrived and tried their best to control the fire. With the help ofthe firefighters, a lot of people left the building safely. At that time aforeign woman came in a hurry to tell the firefighters something. But theycouldnt understand what she said. I went to the woman and asked her what washappening. She told me that her daughter was still in the building. I told thefirefighters about it at once. They immediately ran into the building. Twominutes later, they rushed out with the little girl.
The woman was very thankful to me and the firefighters forthe help.
解析
试题分析:本文是一则日记,格式已经写好。描述图片是不能面面俱到,一定要讲重点,甚至一句话就能概括一幅图。主要描述自己是如何帮助外国人翻译的,以及消防队员是如何做的。最后可以增加外国妇女对自己和消防队员的感谢。
考点:侧重时间表达,时态一致,常见叙事表达如:be about to do ...when..., hardly...when,ondoing...., later, immediately,eventually.
点评:日记一般要写日期和天气,写在日记第一行的右上角,不过本篇已经给出。如果是命题日记,要把标题写在日记的第二行。将正文空两格写在第三行,一般日记都是直接切入正题。日记一般都是第一人称,时态用过去式,现在完成时和一般现在时。
写作常见步骤推荐:1. 审题: 体裁, 时态,人称。
2. 列要点,找准动词或动词短语。
3. 扩展句子。
4. 加关联词。
5. 核查错误:有无冠词错误,拼写错误,主谓一致错误等低级错误。
特别提醒:加强训练书写,整洁美观的卷面对作文的得分起着至关重要的作用。
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