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OUTLINE REVISION Thesis: schools should replace giving grades with written evaluations of the student’s strengths and weaknesses, which can make students, know more about themselves, develop their enthusiasm and enforce the relationship between teachers and students.Written evaluation can make students learn more about themselves.Written evaluation can develop the student’s enthusiasm.Written evaluation can reinforce the friendship between the teachers and students.Conclusion: school should replace with the written evaluations to evaluate the studentsFIRST DRAFT SELF REVISION Written Evaluation Should Be EncouragedGiving grades is always the means, when teachers check the student’s homework, examinations and so on. Nowadays, many people think that giving students grades does more harm than good. I agree with them that schools should replace giving grades with written evaluations of the student’s strengths and weaknesses, which would benefit both students and parents, even the teachers.First of all, written evaluations can make students learn about themselves clearer. They can know their strengths and weaknesses, when they check their homework or examination paper. Then, they can know their problems clearly and they can deal with their problems according to their competence. At the same time, they know how to nourish their interests based on their strengths.Along with making students learn more about themselves, written evaluations can develop a student’s enthusiasm. Because of the written evaluations, they know their hardworking was recognized by the teachers; because of the teacher’s encouragement, they are more motive and active in their study. All in all, their enthusiasm on study will be developed by the teacher’s evaluations because they have motivations and they aspire to reorganization. Besides, parents can get more information about their child when checking their homework. Instead of scold as usual, they know how to help their child to overcome their weaknesses in time. The family quarrel between parents and children will have no chances to exist.What’s more, written evaluations can reinforce the communication between teachers and students. As we all know, only using true or false and the grades to evaluate students will affect the student’s thinking and mood. Sometimes, it will have an effect on the communications between teachers and students. On the contrary, using written evaluations will give more chances for teachers and students to know about each other well enough. As time goes by, the friendship between them will be built.Based on the advantages of written evaluations, schools should try to use the written evaluations of the student’s strengths and weaknesses to evaluate the students. Teachers, students and parents can benefit from the way in different level. SECOND DRAFT PEER REVIEW Written Evaluation Should Be EncouragedGiving grades is always the means, when teachers check the student’s homework, examinations and so on. Nowadays, many people think that giving students grades does more harm than good. I agree with their opinion that schools should replace giving grades with written evaluations of the student’s strengths and weaknesses, which would benefit both students and parents, even the teachers.First of all, written evaluations can make students learn about themselves clearer. While the grades only tell them the single score they have been given, they can know their strengths and weaknesses when they check their homework or examination paper. Then, they can know their problems clearly and they can deal with their problems according to their competence. At the same time, they know how to nourish their interests based on their strengths and they will pay more attention to their problems in case that they happen again.Along with making students learn more about themselves, written evaluations can develop a student’s enthusiasm. Written evaluation, especially the firm evaluation on the student’s strengths can inspire them. They will be more active and motive because of the teacher’s reorganization and encouragement. All in all, their enthusiasm on study will be developed by the teacher’s evaluations because they have motivations and they aspire to reorganization. Besides, parents can get more information about their child when checking their homework. Instead of scold as usual, they know how to help their child to overcome their weaknesses in time. The family quarrel between parents and children will have no chances to exist.What’s more, written evaluations can reinforce the communication between teachers and students. As we all know, only using true or false and the grades to evaluate students will affect the student’s thinking and mood. Sometimes, it will have an effect on the communications between teachers and students. On the contrary, using written evaluations will give more chances for teachers and students to know about each other well enough. As time goes by, the friendship between them will be built.Based on the advantages of written evaluations, schools should try to use the written evaluations of the student’s strengths and weaknesses to evaluate the students. Teachers, students and parents can benefit from the way in different level. 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